What do you think of my story so far? (It's a little long)?

Wrong category lol, but nice story I couldn't stop reading it once I started :) Let me explain: i just meant it was similar to twilight not neccasarily in a bad way because the eyes change color, she's a vampire, she's pale, she's beautiful and strong, and when she gets bitten it's painful, also because she falls in love and it's with a human right? Just like edward and bella but the other way around oh sorry